It was great to get some feedback on the film so far! I'm in progress of adding some changes to the animatic based on the ideas I got.

For one, I'll be changing the neck bleeding to either Val's mouth bleeding or blood coming from her head, one person gave feedback that it made them think they killed each other and I want to make it more clear that it isn't that. To add to making it clearer that they didn't kill each other, I think I might add into the final scene a shot from London's POV of him seeing a shadowy figure running away and them him focusing back on Val's dead body, more of a dramatic reveal. Add in a sound to hear someone running away across the pavement, to make it more clear. I'll also probably add more details to her bag spilling onto the ground, to make it more clear her bag was robbed in the process.

There was a suggestion to establish Val sooner or make it more clear she was a singer in the opening somehow before seeing her in the bath, so I think I'll have a mention of her before he goes into the bathroom. Probably him stopping to light the cigarette and another band member comes up to pat him on the shoulder and tell him they had a great show and that "Val would be proud of us." Establish her right away, and give more clarity to the fact that he isn't at fault for her death, but regardless he still feels guilt for surviving. I think having an outside person mention her and mention that she would be proud of them will push the fact that this conflict is within himself alone, and how he's struggling to process his grief.

I may rework some of the dialogue as well, it seems like there was a general murkiness around if Val is angry or vengeful or how she feels toward him overall. Frankly, it's a hard thing for me to pin down since REAL Val wouldn't be haunting London like this anyways, this is his own mind playing tricks on him as he's riddled by the guilt of her death and feeling like he stole her life away from her. I think I'll push the dialogue toward her being annoyed / angry / frustrated with him, since it's how he feels like she'd feel, if that makes sense.

I'll be working on those changes when I get back from work tomorrow.